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[Shigeo]

 "You make your way to the edge of a snow covered cliff. Looking down, you see a huge city with snowy rooftops, its beauty hides the endless civil wars that it has experienced. Inside the dark alleys of the city...the fight for survival between the poverty-stricken goes unnoticed.

Water Country is also located here, protected by a dense forest of tall snowy pine trees. The village earned the nickname, "the Village Hidden in the Bloody Mist", because of its gruesome graduation exam in the past. The well-known Seven Shinobi Swordsmen of the Mist were born from this very village... "
 

I love the fact that the new description is up; it's awesome. Buuut....a minor detail still nags me.

The navy bit should read Kirigakure no Sato, since that is the capital village; Water Country is...well, the country itself. It doesn't make much sense for the country and village to be one and the same. ;

[Mihamaru]

"You make your way to the edge of a snow covered cliff. Looking down, you see a huge city with snowy rooftops, its beauty hides the endless civil wars that it has experienced. Inside the dark alleys of the city...the fight for survival between the poverty-stricken goes unnoticed.

Water Country is also located here, protected by a dense forest of tall snowy pine trees. The village earned the nickname, "the Village Hidden in the Bloody Mist", because of its gruesome graduation exam in the past. The well-known Seven Shinobi Swordsmen of the Mist were born from this very village... "
 

I love the fact that the new description is up; it's awesome. Buuut....a minor detail still nags me.

The navy bit should read Kirigakure no Sato, since that is the capital village; Water Country is...well, the country itself. It doesn't make much sense for the country and village to be one and the same. ;

That, or Mist Village

[Shigeo]

Village Hidden in the Mist. No laziness and cutting corners. >:[

[Neji]

 

Hmmmm

I will re-do the entire "where are you from" part...

the base "races" are from the core, modified. I wrote my own system that is now used in Bleach i.e.

How does a rename to cities instead of countries sound?

[Mihamaru]

Hmmmm

I will re-do the entire "where are you from" part...

the base "races" are from the core, modified. I wrote my own system that is now used in Bleach i.e.

How does a rename to cities instead of countries sound?

Sounds good to me, but I've never noticed.

[Mioku]

Hmmmm

I will re-do the entire "where are you from" part...

the base "races" are from the core, modified. I wrote my own system that is now used in Bleach i.e.

How does a rename to cities instead of countries sound?

but konoha is already a city what are you going to name that or fire country if you do that?

[Neji]

 

see my problem? =)

I will leave Konoha as capital. I have to.

[Gyu~ru~ru]

 "You make your way to the edge of a snow covered cliff. Looking down, you see a huge city with snowy rooftops, the heart of Water Country. Its beauty hides the endless civil wars that it has experienced. Inside the dark alleys of the city...the fight for survival between the poverty-stricken goes unnoticed.

Kirigakure is also located here, protected by a dense forest of tall snowy pine trees. The village earned the nickname, "the Village Hidden in the Bloody Mist", because of its gruesome graduation exam in the past. The well-known Seven Shinobi Swordsmen of the Mist were born from this very village... "

[Mioku]

see my problem? =)

I will leave Konoha as capital. I have to.

so naming fire country would be the problem...well fire country could become where most of the ninja activity is and Konoha the Business part where all gates are

[Neji]

then the other cities would have to be seperated too....

:-/ bad thing somehow.

[Mihamaru]

We could always go with dub names?

[Gyu~ru~ru]

We can just solve this by changing the text to,

You make your way to the edge of a snow covered cliff. Looking down, you see a huge city with snowy rooftops, the heart of Water Country. Its beauty hides the endless civil wars that it has experienced. Inside the dark alleys of the city...the fight for survival between the poverty-stricken goes unnoticed.

Kirigakure is also located here, protected by a dense forest of tall snowy pine trees. The village earned the nickname, "the Village Hidden in the Bloody Mist", because of its gruesome graduation exam in the past. The well-known Seven Shinobi Swordsmen of the Mist were born from this very village...

As you make your way down the misty trail to the city, a lumberjack mumbles that it's [time] as he passes you by.

Or

You make your way to the edge of a snow covered cliff. Looking down, you see a huge city with snowy rooftops, the heart of Water Country. Its beauty hides the endless civil wars that it has experienced. Inside the dark alleys of the city...the fight for survival between the poverty-stricken goes unnoticed.

As you make your way down the misty trail to the city, a lumberjack mumbles that it's [time] as he passes you by.

[Shigeo]

The first one, definitely.