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atomkai

Text (appears in bio page newsfeed, maybe other places as well):

Quotewas killed and eaten as for challenging Mr. Black, companion of  Lady Erwin.


Suggested alternative:

Quotewas killed and eaten for challenging Mr. Black, companion of  Lady Erwin.

KayentaMoenkopi

Misspelled Armor Item.

A White Shinobi Shozoko (9), available in Sunagakure for 74 DK warrior.

Should be Shinobi Shōzoku

Neji

Never judge a cow by its udder.

KayentaMoenkopi

Old man event...Something Special...generated in Jiseigakure..

Surprise is spelled wrong. So is apparent.

Feeling really generous, you hand the old man a bulging sack containing all of your gold! The old beggar's eyes go wide with suprise as he eyes the large amount of gold in his hands.

"Why, I..." he stutters, tears forming in his eyes. "I don't know what to say! In all my life, no one's ever been so kind! Why I...I..."

He suddenly drops the gold to the ground and clutches at his chest in pain. With one last gasp he falls over sideways, dead from an apparant heart attack.

Feeling really nervous, you decide it would be best to depart before someone sees you.


Bocchiere

Well, that was depressing.

Eric

Quote from: bocchiere on November 17, 2014, 09:17:03 AM
Well, that was depressing.

Yeah. Character should have taken their gold back. He won't need it where he's going. ;)

I don't think I've ever gotten that event now that I think about it.
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Becquerel

Bumping an old topic, but this is why.

QuoteYou have encountered Poisonous Moth which lunges at you with Poisonous Powder!

Poisonous Moth's Hitpoints (Level 2): 30
Supernova Becquerel: 21
Kyuubi rages into battle.
Kyuubi swings his claws and hits Poisonous Moth for 9 points of damage.
You hit Poisonous Moth for 2 points of damage!
Poisonous Moth tries to hit you but you RIPOSTE for 7 points of damage!
Poisonous Moth bare its piercing fangs..."!

If the moth is using poison powder, why is it bearing it's fangs? I don't know if the poison module is just a blanket thing that makes them all say that...But maybe it can change to "spreads its poisonous powder." instead.
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Neji

Yes... the reason is a bit ... awkward.

"You have encountered {ENEMYNAME} which lungs at you with {WEAPON}!"

That's the base of the sentence, the two variables get filled in. So I can't (easily) change it for the one enemy.

The ".... beare its piercing fangs" is a default sentence for that enemy to start his/her/its round and attack sequence. Can be done per enemy.
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Teostra

Problem with the text when killing Orochimaru.

QuoteThe Orochimaru pauses, breathing heavily before continuing, "I will tell you a secret. Behind me now are my successors. They will hatch, and the young will battle each other. Only one will survive, but he will be the strongest. He will quickly grow, and be as powerful as me and inherit my mind." Breath comes shorter and shallower for the Orochimaru.

Problem one. "The Orochimaru pauses..." and "shallower for the Orochimaru."
Could you get rid of those 'the's? They're kind of pointless. And about the hatching thing...I know that it was a green dragon we were originally killing, but could you change the text to something like..

QuoteOrochimaru pauses, breathing heavily before continuing, "I will tell you a secret. Behind me now are my successors. The experiments will complete, and they  will battle each other. Only one will survive, but he will be the strongest. I will transfer my mind to his body, and be more powerful than before." Breath comes shorter and shallower for Orochimaru.

Just an idea. If you could think of something better to change it to, then do that. I figured that would be okay considering Oro swapped bodies every so often.

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KayentaMoenkopi

Hakke Hyakunijyūhasshō! - You deal execute a lethal maneuver of hits!

Deal and execute are redundant of each other.

Taken from forest fighting and the use of Hyuuga Technique.

KayentaMoenkopi

So today I am forest fighting on Neala in the Iwagakure forest.

I need healing and go to Sakura for the bargain potions. You can see by this image that the potion I require for a complete healing is priced at 544 gp, a good 27 gp cheaper than the flying med nin healing priced at 571 gp.

http://i554.photobucket.com/albums/jj433/KayentaMoenkopi/complete%20heal%20potion_zpswxrdsjgj.jpg

I go with Sakura's price and drink the potion. However,  after I receive my complete healing, the med nin price of a complete healing at 577 is still a clickable option. And I have, in the past, gone ahead and clicked that even though I was already completely healed and had the gp deducted from my purse. Which is shown here in the next photo, I am completely healed but can still pay for the med nin. That really should not be possible.

http://i554.photobucket.com/albums/jj433/KayentaMoenkopi/Complete%20heal%20after%20potion_zps6qgfbv3k.jpg


Neji

Never judge a cow by its udder.

KayentaMoenkopi

Thank you Neji. However a new error has appeared associated with the quick healing.

I can heal in the forest, and it takes my gold as usual. But the text reads:

"Sorry, you are already healed... my services are not needed. "

Could the fix have created a bug? or is something a miss with your Happy Birthday module? I did not notice if this was going on yesterday or not.

Sorry.

Ѕhadow


Kihou's Hitpoints (Level 10): 99
Kaguya ° ° Shadow: 101
Kaiten! - You deal some damage to all enemies!
You hit Kihou for 27 damage with your Kaiten!
You hit Kihou for 30 damage with your Kaiten!
You hit Kihou for 25 damage with your Kaiten!
You hit Kihou for 21 damage with your Kaiten!
You receive 117 experience!
End of Round:
Kihou's Hitpoints (Level 10): DEFEATED
Kaguya ° ° Shadow: 101
Searching the lifeless body of Kihou you find a Mystical Knives.
Why don't he shoot something more explosive?
You have defeated Kihou!
You receive 227 gold!

Should be: doesn't

Or I'm just too picky with word choice.
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KayentaMoenkopi

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