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[kyutu]

must be chaotic
must be in sand village
moon must be full

if forest

you are walking down the forest in sand village and you see the kazekage you

A) talk to him
B) leave

a) you go talk to gaara

he stares at you with anger
kankoro"what ever you do stay away from him
the shukaku's mad do to lake of blood"
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he still is angry you start to think the shukaku wants your blood

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gaara with sand level 15 hp 250 takes out 5-20 no mater your defense

you die you die

you win

he gets back up this time his sand is forming around him he says
"when the moon is full when the moon is full
its blood ravels"
you

A) run

B) Fight

A) you escape

B)

you fight
gaara with shukaku level 20 hp 50 takes out 30-50 each time no matter defense

you die yep

you win
he falls but his sand doesn’t you

a) run
b) fight
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a) you escape

b)
you fight sand with more sand
level 1
hp infinite
takes out 100 each time no mater your defense

you win) you’re the admin because you altered its hp
you lose)
the world goes blank around you as you knock out

you have a 90 percent of dieing when this happens and you don't get the reward if you don't die

you wake up new day

you feel weird powerful but weird


new thing under special category
incarnation of sand

yin side
your defense triples for 3 rounds
in thoughts 3 rounds your attack is doubled
like curse mark its forever
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yang side
can only use when chaotic
when over leaves you with one hp
0 defense when over
no more turns for rest of day

[LeafToad]

No "invincibles"... cheap way out.

Gah, come on, Gaara's not that cold blooded, though may be hard to believe. When he actually became a Kazekage, his first deed was helping Rock Lee from Kimimaro, so it would be weird for him to all of a sudden just lunge at you.... There is also not even a plot to back it up, I've never seen Gaara just lunge at someone because they tried to talk to him(in casual conversation at least).

[kyutu]

No "invincibles"... cheap way out.

Gah, come on, Gaara's not that cold blooded, though may be hard to believe. When he actually became a Kazekage, his first deed was helping Rock Lee from Kimimaro, so it would be weird for him to all of a sudden just lunge at you.... There is also not even a plot to back it up, I've never seen Gaara just lunge at someone because they tried to talk to him(in casual conversation at least).

1:o.k your defence triples
2:uhhhh he woke up on the wrong side of the bed dis morning

[LeafToad]

No "invincibles"... cheap way out.

Gah, come on, Gaara's not that cold blooded, though may be hard to believe. When he actually became a Kazekage, his first deed was helping Rock Lee from Kimimaro, so it would be weird for him to all of a sudden just lunge at you.... There is also not even a plot to back it up, I've never seen Gaara just lunge at someone because they tried to talk to him(in casual conversation at least).

1:o.k your defence triples
2:uhhhh he woke up on the wrong side of the bed dis morning

O.o euuuukay.

Wouldn't you say for a Kazekage to go killing for no reason is a bit... beneath him(yes, yes, even with Shukaku inside him)?

[kyutu]

No "invincibles"... cheap way out.

Gah, come on, Gaara's not that cold blooded, though may be hard to believe. When he actually became a Kazekage, his first deed was helping Rock Lee from Kimimaro, so it would be weird for him to all of a sudden just lunge at you.... There is also not even a plot to back it up, I've never seen Gaara just lunge at someone because they tried to talk to him(in casual conversation at least).

1:o.k your defence triples
2:uhhhh he woke up on the wrong side of the bed dis morning

O.o euuuukay.

Wouldn't you say for a Kazekage to go killing for no reason is a bit... beneath him(yes, yes, even with Shukaku inside him)?

the sukaku wanted blood and the person was anoing him

[Neji]

kyutu, I appreciate your efforts, but

pretty please: bring some visual structure into your post... I can't read it as it simply gives me headache... you should try to do it at a slow pace and watch for proper spelling... also, you might try to indent the subsections a bit... you have still no sections there.. just one empty line between options, sections, new sentences....

get i.e. notepad ++ and use tabs to give it a structure... download i.e. a module from here and you see that in programming it is the same... you indent sub-stuff. so you can see what level you are on...

[darkshinobi]

It is great but... well This is somethings  all of your requests.
1.Proper spelling(I need help with this also)
2.Seperation(Like neji said)
3.It needs Details, a story behind it.
And 4.Dont make the Reward toogood.

Other than that, your requests are GREAT!

[kyutu]

i have spell checked it and said why he's mad

[darkshinobi]

well, its better.

[kyutu]

anything i should do to make it better

[darkshinobi]

uh...the idea itself is great...make sure you put punctuaion but thats just a reading thing...

[kyutu]

o.k