I... couldn't resist. Sorry.
THE FOREST MERCHANT
He
opens his coat and you see quite a few stuff arranged in rows on the
inside of his coat.
(redundancy makes it awkward… it sounds better if you just leave it at “in rows on the inside.”)
"Well, that's what I can do for you... See you
later!(missing end quotation mark)
WATER COUNTRY INTRO
Water Country, Water country, is home to heavy mist. Profoundly run by the infamous Gatoh. This town seems rather poor.
(Water Country is doubled)
As you walk past one of the poorest looking old women you've ever seen you ask the
time
and she tells you that it is 11:19 am before walking away.
(Need comma after time and delete line break)
MISSION HEADQUARTERS
The wood-
panelled walls are covered with anime wall scrolls and weapons.
(Paneled)
In the chair closest to the fire sits Shikamaru, reading a book called 'Come Come
Paradise'. You wonder about that as he is too young for an R rated book...
(period belongs inside apostrophe mark)
BATTLE ARENA
If you lose against
an fighter here, you will also lose battlepoints.
(a)